[Boston-editorial] Equadorian uprising? recently posted comment

[Matthew Williams]

Sofia --

I've looked at the article you posted at 
http://boston.indymedia.org/newswire/display/35412/index.php

Although you're normally a good writer, I have not centered it because 
I think it needs some editing. It feels somewhat disjointed to me--it 
doesn't flow well. It needs to b better organized, so people can get a 
sense of the course of events. May be a first paragraph summarizing 
everything that happened leading up to the ouster, then more paragraphs 
spelling out what happened in more detail? I think a little more 
explanation of the background issues would help as well--things like 
Gutierrez was elected on an anti-neoliberal platform, then immediately 
sold out; this recent history of massive unrest in Ecuador; that sort 
of thing, so people  have some context. I'm not thinking anything super 
long or detailed--just something that makes it clearer what's going on 
and why. I found the article a little confusing as is.

On the other hand, if anyone feels this is super-urgent and needs to be 
featured now, with editing done later, I won't block featuring it. I do 
understand it's importance--that's part of why I'd like things to be 
clearer.

-- Matt

On Apr 20, 2005, at 8:21 PM, Matthew Williams wrote:

> I moved it out and made it an independent article anyway. The way the 
> system's set up, it's pretty easy to do. -- Matt
>
> On Apr 20, 2005, at 6:21 PM, Pete Stidman wrote:
>
>> Sofia's got it covered, we got two in other press and
>> one from her on the newswire.  just doing some
>> factchecking on one last thing...
>>
>> -Pete
>> --- "Jonathan D. Proulx" <jon at csail.mit.edu> wrote:
>>>
>>> my spanish is wretched, but this bears looking into
>>> by some I think.
>>>
>>> at the end of the center piece on the PR Vampires
>>>
>> http://boston.indymedia.org/feature/display/35354/index.php
>>> is a
>>> totally unrelated comment in spanish which as best I
>>> can recounts
>>> police clashing with peacful protesters this AM with
>>> hundreds of
>>> injuries and the death of atleast one person,
>>> Chilean journalist Julio
>>> Garcia.
>>>
>>> Dispatch folks: is anyone available and able to
>>> chace this down a bit?
>>>
>>> Editorial folks: if this is happening it's
>>> important, but it has
>>> nothing to do with where it's posted, should/can we
>>> move it from a
>>> comment to it's own piece? should probably try and
>>> get some sort of
>>> confirmation/verification.
>>>
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