[Imc-uk-features] feature proposal (George Fox 6: Campus Activism at the Crossroads)

[ionnek]

Hi ftp,
good feature! if you want to know "my" criteria - lots of links, 
background to the story in the body, local event with wider implications...

Comment:
The only thing i would change is to move the first paragraph of the 
abstract into the body of the mail. I mean the paragraph about the 
problems of academia. I think a feature abstract should generally start 
with the concrete what happened, when, where etc (the trial), so that 
the reader can see immediately what's new, then decide if she wants to 
move on to more background, ideology, analysis.

The second paragraph implicitely raises all the things you mention in 
the first paragraph - the lack of funding, the corporate presence, the 
threat to dissenters. And phunkees photo-job speaks a clear language, 
too. Maybe, if it is very important to you, you could just keep the last 
sentence of the first paragraph in the abstract?

Students who object to the corporate raids on their campuses can expect to see themselves
facing harsh measures, including criminal prosecutions


Please don't read this as "you must change this" - i'm just trying to 
revive the tradition of discussing features in detail.

best
ionnek